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parents sound asleep
the back door creaking open
giddy girls laugh
moonlight dances on their face
arm in arm walking
in soldier fashion
the ditches are their shelter
dew soaked shoes
and waxy hands
from the guiding light
a little bit of freedom
is all they ever wanted
©2007-2009 ~bothwellpwns
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back when we were 13/14 yrs old Kim (my bestie) & I used to sneek out of the house at 3AMish and walk the 1km into town to meet boys.
it wasnt so much of the meeting boys that was the thrill,
we enjoyed the walk into town

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It's interesting...I like it, but I'm not sure I understand what it's about...

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These fragile dusty frames
House canvases of souls.
We are bruised and broken masterpieces,
But we did not paint ourselves."

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I like this poem very much, to be honest I wasn't too keen on the other two. This one has good imagery (I really like the line 'in soldier fashion';) and even where the flow is rough in a couple of places it's endearing.

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Thannks Herb! :love:

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bi-biddy ba-biddy boo
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anytime :D
is that jutler in the car in your one visual poetry?

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mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind."
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haha
no its babby.

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Love the imagery!

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